雅思写作:增强语句表现力的五种方法

2022-05-28 23:16:15

  一、避免使用语意弱的“be

  1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如:

  Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.

  Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)

  Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)

  2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如:

  1) Weak: The team members are good players.

  Revision: The team members play well.

  2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.

  Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.

  3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中,把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如:

  1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.

  Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.

  2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.

  Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.

  二、多用语意具体的动词,保持句意简洁明了。例如:

  1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.

  Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.

  2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.

  Better: She compares prices and quality.