2015年3月28日雅思写作真题解析以及语言素材

2022-06-03 08:00:04

  

  小作文:bar chart(柱形图)

  薛鹏解析:动态比变化;静态比高低.

  大作文:

  Some people believe that the increasing use of the computers and the mobile phones has a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skill,do you agree or disagree?

  薛鹏解析:新题出现; 科技对于年轻人的阅读和写作的影响。

  薛鹏原创范文赏析:

  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

  The past century has witnessed tremendous changes in high-tech products and these changes altered our reading choices. Currently, the growing number of young people have been attracting by many popular entertainment such as the cell phone or the computer, therefore, an opinion spring up that reading and writing competence among youngsters in many nations is at risk now. As I see it, the popularity of high-tech products does not necessarily have a adverse influence on people’s reading and writing abilities.

  解析:The past century has witnessed tremendous changes in high-tech products 过去的一个世纪中,高科技产品发展极快。

  解析:the growing number of young people have been attracting by …… 越来越多的年轻人一直被……吸引

  解析:have a adverse influence on …… 对于……有不良影响

  二段:第一次支持作家立场:

  Although our entertainment culture has been shifting, people still read and think, they just have different preferences. Thanks to the contrivance of the Internet of the mobile phone, our reading choice has been greatly diversified and enriched. Indeed, people used to rely on print media for cultural growth and spiritual enjoyment, yet, youngsters can sill expose to a rich array of excellent literature works via the Internet, the mobile phone, radio or television. E-reading could also stir one’s imagination, stimulate one’s creativity, sharpen one’s aesthetic responses. For example, I enjoy listening to my favorite audio-visual books by my phone, those vivid narration on classic works deepened my insight into life and strengthened my cultural deposits. Hence, it is rather groundless to say that high-tech products will definitely decline one’s literacy.

  解析:they just have different preferences 人们的阅读喜欢有所变化

  解析:thanks to = owing to 由于……

  解析:indeed 的确

  解析:cultural growth and spiritual enjoyment 文化成长和精神享受

  解析:stir one’s imagination, stimulate one’s creativity, sharpen one’s aesthetic responses v 激发人的想象力和创造力,使人们对于美学的认知更加敏锐。

  解析:audio-visual books n试听图书

  解析:deepened my insight into life and strengthened my cultural deposits. 加深了我对于生活的洞察,增强了我的文化底蕴

  解析:it is rather groundless to say that …… 认为……是没有依据的

  解析:high-tech products will definitely decline one’s literacy 高科技产品一定会使人们的读写能力下降。

  三段:第二次支持作家立场:

  Further,the deterioration of young adults’ writing skill can never be blamed on the popularization of high-tech products. Conversely, on-line writing is still an effective way to polish up one’s writing skills. Traditionally, only famous writers can publish their books, however, many youngsters now could wholeheartedly run their own blogs or micro blogs. The writers’ zeal can be highly stimulated if their stories or thoughts can arouse readers’ sympathy. In this sense, on-line creation actually nurture many youngsters’ writing talents. A case in point is that many popular cyber writers have sprung up like mushrooms. As for those who have true love for voicing their inner thoughts, the availability of high-tech means is a good trend.

  解析:the deterioration of young adults’ writing skill 年轻写作技能的生疏

  解析:can never be blamed on …… 不能被归咎为……

  解析:polish up one’s writing skills v改善写作技能

  解析:could wholeheartedly run their own blogs or micro blogs 全心全意地经营博客或者微博

  解析:writers’ zeal can be highly stimulated 作家的写作热情会被高度激发

  解析:arouse readers’ sympathy v引起读者的共鸣

  解析:have sprung up like mushrooms. ……如同雨后春笋一般崛起

  四段:让步原题观点的合理性 + 加以反驳

  Granted,I have to concede that high-tech product is a double-edged sword,which can be used for equally good or evil. After all, overdependence on high-tech products might trigger the decline of one’s literacy or undermine one’s ability to think. As the passive receivers of the information, numerous young people are too lazy to have a in-depth thought under the subtle influence of the computer or the cell phone, then, some youngsters may be slow in developing their reading ability and writing techniques. What I want to rebut, however, is that some people slacken their efforts at reading or writing might also be attributed to fierce competence or heavy workload.

  解析:…… is a double-edged sword,which can be used for equally good or evil. ……是一把双刃剑,有利有弊。

  解析:undermine one’s ability to think v渐渐地损害一个人的思考能力

  解析:under the subtle influence of 在……的微妙影响下

  解析:techniques = skills n技巧

  解析:What I want to rebut, however, is that ……但是,我想反驳的是……

  解析:slacken their efforts at…… 放松了在……的努力

  解析:might also be attributed to fierce competence or heavy workload. 可以被归结为激烈的竞争和繁重的工作量

  尾段:再次亮明观点,总结理由

  Overall,it is my view that the impact of the Internet or the mobile phone might be one of the reasons leading to poor reading or writing skills amongst young people,however,it is not the sole or the most crucial factor. On the contrary, youngsters’ ability to think and read can be greatly improved in a high-tech era.

  解析:Overall,it is my view that…… 我的立场是……

  解析:however,it is not the sole or the most crucial factor. 然而,这不是唯一的最最要的原因

  解析:amongst young people 在年轻之间

  解析:on the contrary 相反的是

  解析:in a high-tech era 在科技时代

  薛鹏全文点评:

  小鹏哥原创范文只是雅思写作之一种,文无定法。本文(网络手机是否影响年轻人的阅读和写作能力)采取让步反驳写法。主题明确;逻辑清晰;衔接顺畅,细节饱满;思维辩证;用词精准,表达精彩。符合雅思写作四项评分标准,可为考生赏析和研读的佳作,建议学习文中精彩的词汇和句法。